Dangers of 5G network – ENC 1101

I completed my first draft essay and had it revised by one of my tutor at my school. Need assistance with making the edits and revision and adding additional information to clarify/strengthen my points on why I am against 5G network.

I have attached the revision and the esssay is below. Please assist with making corrections and edits. Should be real quick.

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Dangers of Fifth-Generation Network (5G)
Cell phone technology has evolved over the years, and customers are getting more excited as wireless carriers make every effort to; provide them with the fastest internet speeds on their devices. Customers watched the network grow G by G from 1G (Edge), to 2G, then to 3G, then to 4G, and then to 4G LTE.

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