Dialogue writing
The following scene is full of obvious exposition. Rewrite the scene using conflict, humor, or a confidante to replace obvious exposition.
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SAL
So when did you move to Cleveland?
TED
About two years ago.
SAL
You are kidding.I moved here two years ago myself.
TED
What are you doing now?
SAL
I work for a large investment banker.
TED
I’m a successful umpire.
SAL
I love baseball.But I have no time to go anymore, let alone play.I used to be a pitcher on the bank’s softball team.
TED
I’m getting a little bored with it, actually.
SAL
How could you? Everyone loves baseball.My kids especially do.
TED
I have no kids.
SAL
I thought you were married.
TED
I was. We divorced.My wife was very selfish; she didn’t want to ruin her figure with children.
SAL
I have three great kids.
TED
That’s great.
SAL
One from each of my marriages.But the third time is the charm; my new wife is a wonderful woman.
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SAL
Have you been to Cleveland for so long or that is your ancestral land? Are you a newbie n the city or something?
TED
I have stepped on Cleveland’s soil for a period of not less than two years now.
SAL
Are you pulling my leg? So you mean I was blind to see you around the neighborhood since I have been here for more than two years? Are you serious in the first place?
TED
What is your current hassle, or what do you do for a living? Or how should I put it to receive a comprehensive answer?
SAL
I’m a great slave in one of the large investment banker. Do you want to know what I do in specific? Or is my answer satisfying?
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